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Canon EOS DIGITAL REBEL XSi
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400
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Jul 27, 2010, 8:27:03 AM
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Through the Clouds - Updated by CandiceSmithPhoto Through the Clouds - Updated by CandiceSmithPhoto
Through the Clouds - July 2010 Naples, Fl Pier

*Updated Feb 2011*
Per :devkkart; suggestion, via critique, I have edited this to a more flattering display size, removed excess from top to make image more square, and edited the curve level(s).

Original image here:


"Summer is the time when one sheds one's tensions with one's clothes, and the right kind of day is jeweled balm for the battered spirit. A few of those days and you can become drunk with the belief that all's right with the world." ~Ada Louise Huxtable

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:iconkkart:
Ok Candice I will have a go at critiquing it :) You ready?

A few things on this image caught my eye, some good and some I feel could be improved on to make the shot better overall, and some which you may wish to keep in mind the next time you shoot, too!

The image overall caught my eye when I browsing images that are seeking critiques on them, it certainly stands out from the rest of the shots a great deal and part of that is sun rays in the sky and the color.

What I think could be improved is this---

I would like to see less sky and more foreground of the water, placing the image of the dock perhaps in the center right side, but a tad below center, to really weight the composition some. This can be accomplished by either zooming in or recomposing the shot entirely.

Also as long as we are talking about composition, I feel this image would really benefit from a completely square crop, so much so that I went ahead and did it for you in a mock up to show you how it would look [link] I also went ahead and did a levels adjustment with layer masking for the lower part of the water to make it pop more and bring out the brightness, lastly I went ahead and sharpened it. As the image you have here seems soft in areas.

I view the shot as itself as a base for a great start it just needs some farther processing to really bring it out and nail the scene as a whole. Curves, levels, etc. Not much at all though really.

I did notice that you shot the image wide open too with f5.6. Don't do that, as lenses are almost always their softest at that aperture unless you are using very high end professional glass. Next time try shooting at f13 at the lowest ISO you possibly can, and in a scene like this that will certainly requite a tripod no questions asked, but the pay off is a sharp image and low noise.

Nice catch on the sunrays, love that you were able to capture them and also the overall color of the shot too.

The very last tip I have is to resize it down, it is very large and people have to scroll to see the whole shot. "Presentation is everything" as they say. So I would suggest in a portrait orientation shot, go 750px at the highest, after that you will need to sharpen it for the web. Lastly, sign it! You should be proud of your work, especially when it is as beautiful as this, and be proud to put your name on it! It deserves it!

Hope this helps!
--John
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At first glance I felt this was a bit too dark for my liking, however now looking at it - really looking at it - I've fallen in love with the image. It's not very often that a photography can instil the feelings inside me that poetry/prose can, but this is one of those rare exceptions.

Technicalities wise it's fantastic, you've got a nice bit of sky and sunset in there to help enhance the pier and the middle ground where land meets sky, which works really well. The sillouhettes you've captured are nice. There is one small dot right central in the image near the bottom, in the sea, that bugs me but I think it's a seagull or something?:D

Other than that, I really love this image, you submitted it ages ago and I'm glad I've just stumbled across it from `kkart's critique!
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MattAngelo Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2011  Professional Photographer
Very nice image. The composition is very simple yet provokes a large amount of complexity. The silhouette of the pier is amazing and very striking with the warm oranges of its backdrop. Very well done.
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CandiceSmithPhoto Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2011
Thank you for the comment/critique. Not very many people give detailed comments, I appreciate it :)
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MattAngelo Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2011  Professional Photographer
your welcome
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scorpiandoll Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
:wave:

you were featured here: [link]

HAPPY BIRTHDAY!

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CandiceSmithPhoto Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2011
thank you :)
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alone-maggie Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
Hello! This photo has been featured here: [link] as a part of our group's monthly features. Please :+fav: this article to make your artwork gain more attention! Have a nice day :wave:
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CandiceSmithPhoto Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2011
Thank you :) I will go check that out now.
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Johhy55 Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2011
Awesome!
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CandiceSmithPhoto Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2011
thank you :)
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urban-lingo Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: looks fantastic.
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